Living without Danger
By Anne B. Walsh
Thank you for writing Living without Danger.
Second one down (again). Simply amazing as always! On to the third for a second round!
Taina
I notice that, as in canon, any mention of the school song disappears here. ;-P
I suppose I can understand why you might react in such a way if you've gotten countless reviews about it and of course I'll accept your apology and offer my own.
Perhaps if I had said a few positive things about your story it may have put my earlier words into the context I meant for them to be in.
I will say this, even to those who try and avoid a Mary-Sue character, your story is still by far one of the better ones in the world of HP fanfiction.
The brand of humor you use closely matches my own and despite all my complaints about her, I love Danger and her relationship with Remus.
The hole Pride/Pack idea it one of the few original idea's to come out of fanfiction in a long time so of course there is that and you write the interaction betweens their members extremely
well.
While I've already started reading The Refiner's Fire and plan on reading the rest of Abraxan's fics as well, I'll restart your fic once I'm finished. I'll even keep in mind what you told me you
tried to do in later chapters.
~James
It's so good to see that you are mature enough to respond to my honest question the way you did!
See, I can be sarcastic as well.
My question about whether or not you intended to write Danger as a Mary-Sue, however, was not. I honestly wanted to know if YOU knew that she appeared to be one. Nothing more, nothing less.
After all, I've been reading fanfiction for years and some authors like to use them and I've read many reviews from people who have felt the same way.
That being said, exactly how was I supposed to know how you felt about them in general or whether or not you knew Danger came off as such?
I'm sure it won't matter to you but after receiving such a wonderful responce to my review, I really doubt I'll ever bother to read your work again. I won't say that I'll never read your stuff after
this because there are always those blue moons to watch out for.
~James
I'm amazed that you're so sure of something that isn't true.
Sarcasm aside, I apologize for my rudeness. I've been writing this 'verse for four and a half years, and have been informed quite often through that time (sometimes more politely than others) that
Danger is a Mary Sue. I've tried to develop her character in the later stories to be less so, and to give other characters more screen time, but I can't change what I've already written. I find my
earliest stories deeply embarrassing now, and I'm afraid I react badly when asked what look, to me, like sarcastic and hurtful questions about them.
I'm aware, now, that you didn't intend the question to hurt, but that's one of the problems with text-only communication--it removes everything but the bare words, and where it would have been clear
in person that you were asking for information, in writing it felt like an attack. Once again, I'm sorry I was rude. I suppose it's too much to ask that you not blame the stories for the faults of
their creator...
I always wondered why Dumbledore and the others didn't suspect that Slytherin's monster was a serpent of some kind since Salazar's most moted ability was speaking to snakes, especially since
Dumbles knew Tom was his heir.
If they had, as far as we know, there are very few serpents that are capable of petrifying someone.
Of course it wouldn't have made for a very long story so i suppose there is that to take into consideration.
~James
I'm not sure how I feel after reading this chapter. I was a good read but once again Danger is all I can think about.
You limited her power but then made her the sec. heir of the rest of the founders. As of now this doesn't mean much but I have this strange feeling that is going to change.
Did you originally intend for her to be such a perfect example of a Mary-Sue(I hate this term but it's the only one that fits Danger)?
~James
Yes, I intentionally wrote something into my story that most readers hate, abhor, and will run miles to avoid, because I secretly don't want anyone to read or like my writing! How clever of
you to figure it out!
I'm starting to think that Danger is a bit too perfect... almost to the point of ruining the story.
I mean, not only does she have the power to tame Remus as a werewolf, but she has promonitions about key events and her powers seem to appear just in time to save the day, and this is on top of the
ability to control fire she got from Godric's daughter.
.... Isn't the hero of this story supposed to be Harry? Sure he played his part in this in the last story and the first part of this one, but Danger seemed to do everything else.
I suppose I first realized that it was when I first stopped reading this story, but I've enjoyed it a lot so I at least owe you enough to try and finish it regardless of what happens.
Not that I'm expecting it to turn into complete rubbish, mind you.
~James
Ron’s face lit up. “D’you think he could get us tickets to see the Cannons?”
“I don’t think there’s any trouble getting tickets to see the Cannons,” said Draco. “It’s usually more a question of, are you going to have to pay for them, or are
they giving them away?”
I don't really know why but I found this part to be just as funny as I did the defeat a werewolf joke. Maybe I'm reading a bit too much fanfiction lately but I can pictture Ron's reaction to this as
if I know him personally.
~James
I started reading this series once before but suddenly lost interest in it only to start it again earlier today, and this joke has made it worth it:
“How do you defeat a werewolf?” asked Neville as they made their way out of class.
“Easy,” said Ron. “Cut its paws off.”
The rest of the group groaned.
As bad as the joke may be, I couldn't help but laugh until I had tears in my eyes.
~James
So who's this MFT that loves Voldemort?
oh wow maybe I was right and Harry is a hier and you just didn't want us to know yet that is interesting... I will say I think I am getting better at figuring out your poems though next year shall be very very interesting I think.
Well wasn't going to review since didn't think that I had a username already guess I was wrong. I really am enjoying your story there is a few things here and there that makes me grimace and ask why you did that but the good is out wieghing the bad by alot. But on this point I understand that you didn't want Harry to probably pull the sword out being a lot of your story revolves around you are the hiers for everyone. I am assuming that since you did it this way Harry nor the Weasleys are the hiers to Griffyndor though I will say I let that pass but to me I really think that you can't take away the aspect of Ginny writing in the diary to me that is one thing that really is a strong point on the story and just seems like your story line in the chamber I don't know it just didn't come out that well at all which is unfortunate since that is the climax of this year. I really think should of stuck to Ginny being taken and to me look like you were going to do it to bad didn't stick to your guns early on. And I am said with no sorting hat being here but like I said that was one thing that I was willing to let slip by.
“Do you bite your thumb at me, sir?” demanded Harry.
Draco leaned over to Luna. “Is the law of our side if I say ay?” he asked casually.
“No.”
“No, sir, I do not bite my thumb at you, sir, but I bite my thumb, sir,” said Draco to Harry.
OH MY GOD!! I LOVE THIS SCENE!!! My friends and I act it out with each other whenever we're mad to break the tension, after someone bites their thumb at someone else. We all crack up hysterically.
That's genius. I'm so glad you used it, that makes me happy.
The story is going great, very good work
