james27 posted a comment on Thursday 12th March 2009 9:19pm

I always wondered why Dumbledore and the others didn't suspect that Slytherin's monster was a serpent of some kind since Salazar's most moted ability was speaking to snakes, especially since Dumbles knew Tom was his heir.

If they had, as far as we know, there are very few serpents that are capable of petrifying someone.

Of course it wouldn't have made for a very long story so i suppose there is that to take into consideration.

~James

james27 posted a comment on Thursday 12th March 2009 5:48pm

I'm not sure how I feel after reading this chapter. I was a good read but once again Danger is all I can think about.

You limited her power but then made her the sec. heir of the rest of the founders. As of now this doesn't mean much but I have this strange feeling that is going to change.

Did you originally intend for her to be such a perfect example of a Mary-Sue(I hate this term but it's the only one that fits Danger)?

~James

Anne B. Walsh replied:

Yes, I intentionally wrote something into my story that most readers hate, abhor, and will run miles to avoid, because  I secretly don't want anyone to read or like my writing! How clever of you to figure it out!

james27 posted a comment on Thursday 12th March 2009 1:41am

I'm starting to think that Danger is a bit too perfect... almost to the point of ruining the story.

I mean, not only does she have the power to tame Remus as a werewolf, but she has promonitions about key events and her powers seem to appear just in time to save the day, and this is on top of the ability to control fire she got from Godric's daughter.

.... Isn't the hero of this story supposed to be Harry? Sure he played his part in this in the last story and the first part of this one, but Danger seemed to do everything else.

I suppose I first realized that it was when I first stopped reading this story, but I've enjoyed it a lot so I at least owe you enough to try and finish it regardless of what happens.

Not that I'm expecting it to turn into complete rubbish, mind you.

~James

james27 posted a comment on Wednesday 11th March 2009 11:46pm

Ron’s face lit up. "D’you think he could get us tickets to see the Cannons?"

"I don’t think there’s any trouble getting tickets to see the Cannons," said Draco. "It’s usually more a question of, are you going to have to pay for them, or are they giving them away?"


I don't really know why but I found this part to be just as funny as I did the defeat a werewolf joke. Maybe I'm reading a bit too much fanfiction lately but I can pictture Ron's reaction to this as if I know him personally.

~James

james27 posted a comment on Wednesday 11th March 2009 11:30pm

I started reading this series once before but suddenly lost interest in it only to start it again earlier today, and this joke has made it worth it:

"How do you defeat a werewolf?" asked Neville as they made their way out of class.

"Easy," said Ron. "Cut its paws off."

The rest of the group groaned.


As bad as the joke may be, I couldn't help but laugh until I had tears in my eyes.

~James

PrayingForMercy posted a comment on Thursday 20th November 2008 12:10pm

So who's this MFT that loves Voldemort?

piltad posted a comment on Friday 3rd October 2008 6:05pm

oh wow maybe I was right and Harry is a hier and you just didn't want us to know yet that is interesting... I will say I think I am getting better at figuring out your poems though next year shall be very very interesting I think.

piltad posted a comment on Friday 3rd October 2008 5:43pm

Well wasn't going to review since didn't think that I had a username already guess I was wrong. I really am enjoying your story there is a few things here and there that makes me grimace and ask why you did that but the good is out wieghing the bad by alot. But on this point I understand that you didn't want Harry to probably pull the sword out being a lot of your story revolves around you are the hiers for everyone. I am assuming that since you did it this way Harry nor the Weasleys are the hiers to Griffyndor though I will say I let that pass but to me I really think that you can't take away the aspect of Ginny writing in the diary to me that is one thing that really is a strong point on the story and just seems like your story line in the chamber I don't know it just didn't come out that well at all which is unfortunate since that is the climax of this year. I really think should of stuck to Ginny being taken and to me look like you were going to do it to bad didn't stick to your guns early on. And I am said with no sorting hat being here but like I said that was one thing that I was willing to let slip by.

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Wednesday 30th July 2008 9:14pm

"Do you bite your thumb at me, sir?" demanded Harry.

Draco leaned over to Luna. "Is the law of our side if I say ay?" he asked casually.

"No."

"No, sir, I do not bite my thumb at you, sir, but I bite my thumb, sir," said Draco to Harry.

OH MY GOD!! I LOVE THIS SCENE!!! My friends and I act it out with each other whenever we're mad to break the tension, after someone bites their thumb at someone else. We all crack up hysterically. That's genius. I'm so glad you used it, that makes me happy.

The story is going great, very good work

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Sunday 27th July 2008 7:06pm

Yora Nidjit. Genius

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Thursday 17th July 2008 5:46pm

Huh. But from which side? The mystery continues...

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Thursday 17th July 2008 5:21pm

Um... WHAT???? NO WAY!!

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Wednesday 16th July 2008 5:47pm

Oh, that almost made me cry. And for a snake. The funeral scene is beautifully written. Very nice job.

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Wednesday 16th July 2008 1:29am

Oh no! No Harry?

I figured out who the crow is! I'm feeling very proud of myself right now. Especially since I guessed it before the "reformed from darkness" (or something like that) line.

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Tuesday 15th July 2008 5:24pm

Cool. Very, very cool

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Friday 11th July 2008 7:28pm

Woah

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Friday 11th July 2008 7:01pm

Oh, so that's how all this is playing out. Fascinating. I'm surprised the force inside Danger isn't connected to Voldemort in more than the sense that she wants to protect Harry. I guess it makes more sense the way you put it but I dunno... Not that it matters, you are the author, your verse is your verse, so what you say is law. And like I said, it makes a lot of sense.

Anyway, story is still great, and I'm looking forward to more.

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Friday 11th July 2008 12:42pm

So Voldie-dearest has some kind of power that clearly influences Danger? How fascinating. I love this.

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Thursday 10th July 2008 7:04am

Before this happened, I was thinking about saying I didn't feel like you were really emphasizing Harry's position of Alpha, that they seemed very equal, and I could hardly see Pack structure. I see it now, obviously. Thanks for brining it back into play, I think it was needed.

Sherylyn posted a comment on Sunday 3rd February 2008 3:18am

Gah... I've been re-reading the series lately, and loving it all over again. This chapter though... I can read it even as a stand-alone (for whatever reason) and feel the urge to bawl right along with poor Harry. Your writing is always lovely, but this chapter just reallllllly resonates with emotion and "real-ness". Excellent, brilliant job! :-)