pstibbons posted a comment on Tuesday 4th July 2006 12:10pm

Brilliant chapter.

pstibbons posted a comment on Tuesday 4th July 2006 10:57am

The business at usual sniglets were great. Me likee this storee

Sterling posted a comment on Sunday 4th June 2006 11:14pm

I like the whole idea of the Pack. But I really think you rush your plot to much. Using these prophetic dreams and such. But you do tell a good story.

Sterling posted a comment on Sunday 4th June 2006 7:32pm

The romance between R/D happened way to quick and was way to contrived. I like your writing style though and you have a decent plot. I am just not fond of pre-packaged romances...just add water and stir. It shouldn't be that easy, even in a story.

Sterling posted a comment on Sunday 4th June 2006 7:08pm

Not sure I like the nickname "Danger" for a muggle clerk. Hopefully you have a bit of a background on that one. I also am not to sure about how you have Remus and Gertrude starting to fall for each other so quick. Prophetic dreams are a bit of a crutch when it comes to writing. I would advise against over-using them. Other then that it was a decent intro and has me interested in seeing where you are taking this.

Donna Mobley posted a comment on Tuesday 23rd May 2006 3:56pm

This was absolutely phenomenal!!! I couldn't stop reading, evidenced by the laundry that has piled up in my reading haze! I can't wait to get on to the sequel.
thank you for sharing your talent.

Donna Mobley posted a comment on Monday 22nd May 2006 1:53pm

I got so engrossed I forgot to review since the first chapter. I really don't have anything to say except.... WoW!! I am liking this more and more.

Donna Mobley posted a comment on Monday 22nd May 2006 12:12pm

intriguing concept, well-written enough to send me to the next chapter! :)

lap10 posted a comment on Monday 8th May 2006 2:23am

Having already read all of your Dangerverse, I can say ahead of time that this is a fantastic universe you've created. So I've decided to re-read it all now that you're on ffa. On to the chapter review now...

I think this is a great portrayal of Remus in the time after Nov. 1981. I had always wondered after PoA what those years must have been like for him, and I wouldn't have pegged him as surviving another decade without anyone. As for Danger, I think even in the first chapter, you've done a good job of fleshing out her character. Especially the first thing she says to Remus -- just blurts it out before she thinks about it. Your dream prophecy is obvious to readers in some spots, though not yet to the characters, yet suitably vague in others.

AK posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd May 2006 2:01am

Wow long story!
Great work really. Your writing style was very good from beggining to end. I didn't notice any mistakes and you hade me hooked up all the way to the end. Now i shall go read the sequel.

AK posted a comment on Monday 1st May 2006 2:18pm

Dam this is long!
really well written thow. Great quality!

AK posted a comment on Monday 1st May 2006 9:23am

The Curse is powerfull enought to turn a muggle magical?

AK posted a comment on Monday 1st May 2006 6:50am

I tried calling Social Services, but they’re backed up for months, and unless he’s in immediate danger, they don’t want to hear about it.

--> really?

seraph7221 posted a comment on Wednesday 12th April 2006 6:09am

This bit of prophesy was harder to figure than the bit with Draco on Mama's back before she took Lucius with her, (the pearl was fairly obvious before as well).
I have just begun reading, a fetching tale thus far, I'd quite like to see the young'uns growing up. At any rate as I haven't read the whole thing don't come down on me to hard if this is already explained but why wouldn't everyone, during the first war with Voldemort, who had lost everything just try the curse of the righteous on him, there would even have been the possibility of doing it in large groups of the bereaved if power was an issue, and certainly it would have been righteous, the whole magical world could have come together as one and asked to take away his magic...just a thought.

Seraph

Anne B. Walsh replied:

No, it hasn't been explained, but it will be (around the end of fourth year, but I see no reason you can't know now).   Voldemort, in the course of his life-expanding and dehumanizing activities, placed protections around his person and effects to keep them from being affected by long-range curses.   Some of his minions may not have been so smart...

Asad posted a comment on Saturday 8th April 2006 2:28am

Nice overall. It did sometimes seem to run on and on but did finally end.

Going to read the sequel now.

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Tuesday 4th April 2006 7:30am

Excellent story. Loved the pack.

Amamama posted a comment on Tuesday 4th April 2006 6:36am

Hmmm, Snape's collecting a bit too many clues. I sure wish he wasn't as observant, but then he never would've made a good spy, I guess.

The budding romance between Charlie and Tonks is incredibly sweet. look forward to see what happens next.

Tweedle-dee!

Amamama posted a comment on Sunday 2nd April 2006 3:13am

Ooohh, the fine mesh is unravelling... Who's next to know? And when will they take a new look at the profetic poem from years ago and see what's missing? Why not share that one with Albus and Minerva, they should be able to catch the Weasley hints in there, shouldn't they? But I guess that's not what you have planned, is it? No easy way out for Sirius... Well, at least he's alive.

Off to the next!

Amamama posted a comment on Sunday 2nd April 2006 2:38am

Feetie Fudge? Nah, I prefer Rocky Road... That said, there's still a toad lurking in the shadows, and I wonder if I could get her? Please, please, please? I found such an intriguing recipe for "recycled toad - probably the best fertilizer there is," and my plants do need a boost...

Great prank, and I loved the way Dumbledore definintely didn't give anybody ideas for it. Old prankster. :-D

Anne B. Walsh replied:

Sorry, I still need the toad for a couple of things.   You can have her when I'm finished, ok?   And yes, I'm quite sure Dumbledore was a prankster in his day.   He still enjoys a good laugh at the expense of authority - witness the end of canon PoA.  

Firejay posted a comment on Sunday 2nd April 2006 2:20am

Sorry, sorry, just gotta ask this... I was reading the chapter names. "Meet new friends, but keep the old. One is silver and the other's gold." Are/were you, perchance, a girl scout at some point? Or did you know one? x3 Thought that was funny.

Uhhmmm. Luffly story. I like it a lot, even if the chapters are a bit short. (Well, it's not surprising that I think the chapters are short, I've been reading Jeconais' stuff for a while). o-O; Yes, I know, I ramble. Sorry. Gonna click 'send' before I ramble any mor-

Anne B. Walsh replied:

I happen to like rambling, being somewhat addicted to it myself.   And yes, I was a Girl Scout for years and years.