Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 12th February 2006 4:31am

Ch.34 - - The "motivation for doing better."

I like that a lot - it is profound.

Great that the thre children are so well adjusted from the tough parts of their lives.

Fun time with the Weasleys and Lovegoods.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 12th February 2006 4:13am

Ch.33 - - The way Hermione handled Mrs. Weasley was choice. She is clever by half. But then she IS Hermione.

I just like this all around and in every way.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 12th February 2006 3:56am

Ch.32 - - Ah, Weasleys. There is something comforting about them entering the story and the active lives of the Pack.

And Ron gets friends of his own - that's great.

I can't stop reading this tale.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 12th February 2006 3:35am

Ch.31 - - Aletha having a magical aunt makes her not exacly quite a Muggleborn, even though her parents might have been Muggle in their understanding... oh I give up on what it all means.

But I like it. Fascinating development.

Harry as a mixed race child makes for even more effective subterfuge for hiding in plain sight.

So enjoyable!

Thalarob posted a comment on Sunday 12th February 2006 3:19am

Thank you

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 12th February 2006 3:06am

Ch.30 - - Hugs and kisses to Neenie on her Snape attack.

Great fun with Mother Black - the old hag.

This was very clever:
"We should have known they’d listen in on us," Aletha said in amusement. "They are Marauders, after all."
"But they’re also cubs," Danger said. "Look. No toothbrushes."

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 12th February 2006 2:41am

Ch.29 - - Okay, humiliate AND hurt Snape. Using Nennie that way, even if he doesn't mean it, and Snape could very well mean it.

A cold plate of revenge, please.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 12th February 2006 2:24am

Ch.28 - - I always feel better when Snape is a bad guy to at least some degree - much better than when he goes good on us towards the end.

Since he IS a spy for Dumbledore, when you foil his attempts as the prophetic dream portrays, can we embarrass him in a VERY public manner? That is much better than merely hurting him. (I know this is already written and posted, but I can wish can't I?)

Captivating story.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 12th February 2006 1:44am

Ch.27 - - The reconstituting plaque for Severus was brilliant, and Dumbledore's note to the Marauders was classic Dumbledore. The return note of denial and instructions on solving the problem were just as extra-canon classic.

Somehow I feel Snape is going to regret his efforts at unravelling the mystery he sees before him.

This was a really clever bit of writing:
"Thank you. You may kiss me now.
And I was wondering just the other day where Neenie gets her imperious ways."

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2006 3:51pm

Ch.26 - - Snape baiting is a favorite passtime. Nice little prank that.

Charlie and Tonks - interesting combo - full of potential.

Great work.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2006 3:17pm

Ch.25 - - I loved the way this went.

I wonder if you have a reason to include her at this point, or was it just something fun to do.

I write bits like that from time to time.

Cheers!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2006 2:38pm

Ch.24 - - I like the torment of Lucius - if a happy Draco is anathama to him, then I hope he dreams those dreams for the next 150 years.

Loads of fun for all.

takon65 posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2006 1:32pm

Wow! That is all I can say. I have laughed numerous times and broke out in tears almost the same ammount. Only someone who is very good can bring those reactions out in me.

I can't wait for more,

Sam

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2006 1:07pm

Ch.23 - - A nice normal life - for a bunch on the run and living in a hidden world of magic.

Draco seems to slowly be fitting in - Tickle!

Can we PLEASE hurt Umbridge now?

Ishtar posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2006 12:19pm

This is just lovely. I've just reread the whole story and reminded myself of why I like it so much. I will wait eagerly for you to post the sequels here.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2006 11:09am

Ch. 21 - - I am not sure, but this may be the best revenge on Lucius I have read. I want him dead, and he could easily be released later in the story in one of the canon or your manufactured prison breaks. So Harry, or anyone of the good guys could really get to kill him in the future.

It is impossible to not feel for a child that is abused, so even Draco can turn out good.

Terrific - redeem them before they need to be impossibly redeemed.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2006 9:32am

Ch.20 - - I somehow read 21 out of order and reviewed it as 16.

I had hoped Narcissa would be more like yours in HBP - didn't happen.

Freeing Dobby in an alternate universe - it's a very Harry thing to do.

Fascinating chapter the way you had Sirius and Narcissa do business.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2006 8:25am

Ch.19 - - Heroic Harry even at this age. Attacking Lucius was wonderful. I just love that he saved Draco AND hurt Lucius, hopefully badly.

I can see canon Draco treated this way and eventually becoming what he fears, his father, the brat that we see in Book One.

Great story.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2006 6:17am

Ch.18 - - Slow death to Lucius. Trampled by hinky-punks maybe over four days.

This scene was hysterical:

"As I was saying," Aletha said with a straight face, "I think Meghan’s teething."

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2006 6:02am

Ch.17 - - I like the way you use songs and poems to get the message across. Most of them have to be yours, I guess.

Impressive.